Teh Wozzinator

Chapter four has... Names Explanations And a really cool trial. lol. By the way, Coconut, I highly disagree with you about the thoughts. I like stories that have them, and ...

Don't worry, I'm editing. But with all these editors and nine chapters it's hard. I've edited chapters one through...five? But I'll still add more edits as I get them. Thanks ...

Hey Aedomir! This isn't an edit, but I wanted to say that I'm reading it on Word, and I'll edit it. But it might take a while...yeah. A long time. ...

Ummm... What the...heck? This really confused me. And I don't get the joke. ???????? Teh Wozzinator

I agree that the last sentence should rhyme.... Your rhythm is good, and your rhyming is good also. I thought that the "cream cheese" part was kind of... cheesy... though. ...

Wow... Now we're getting into it, huh?! I like it.... Finally we actually "see" the Mutt, and witness it fight. Cool. I like it. No edits. Probably the coolest Mutts ...

I just wanted to say I read this--I've got to leave in a couple of minutes, but I wouldn't have the best crit anyways. Your writing style's great, and I ...

Umm...the car that they're riding in is Dante's Ferrari, so he's taking Bill in the car, and Brandon gets left on the side of the road. And the car behind ...

Yeah, I agree that you used too much "straight-out fact". And some of your sentences are... long and confusing. One that stood out was: "His father, also a sorcerer, trained ...

If you haven't read this story yet, here's a link to chapter one: Thanks to all my readers! Now, begin... Nine One Last Meeting? Dante pulled over to the shoulder ...

I think your descriptions of the two men were just fine, since it sets them in contrast. I loved the way you talked about their timing and so on and ...

I agree, that first sentence was a bit much. I had to read through twice to understand it. lol! Anyways, after reading DoaV, this is a great change in plot, ...

Okay, here it is...(obviously, if you haven't, you should read the first seven chapters before reading this.) By the way, this is an action/adventure novel for everyone who hasn't read ...

Argh! Another poem that was deleted before I got to it. I may not read anything ever again.... Teh Wozzinator

Wow...delete...how...deep lol... I know what it means... but now I'm curious as to what the poem was originally. Teh Wozzinator